Feedback needed

topic posted Mon, April 28, 2008 - 3:51 PM by 
I've posted a mock-up for a one-sided business card in the album for this Tribe. I'd appreciate feedback on it. Thanks in advance.
posted by:
  • letter size?

    Mon, April 28, 2008 - 4:41 PM
    If someone gave ME a business card that looked like that, I'd hold on to it. But the lettering: is the contact info clear enough to read on the 'real' card?
    • Re: letter size?

      Mon, April 28, 2008 - 4:45 PM
      The contact info is in Arial, regular, so it should be fairly clear... Do you mean size-wise? I can see how that might be too small. I'm trying to keep it from going over the photo, but I may just have to make it a bit smaller so I can bump up the font size. OR get a shorter e-mail address!
  • Re: Feedback needed

    Mon, April 28, 2008 - 4:42 PM
    ooo, it's really pretty! Some ideas...
    If it were me I would make the "O" in BO a smaller size than the "B". No offense, but I was saying "B - O" not Bo, at first glance. But I have a pretty gross mind, so that might just be me.
    There's a fair amount of blank space on the left, I like some space but this feels a little empty. Not really sure what you could do to make it feel less empty, but to me it feels like there's something missing... Do you have any other info that you would want people to know? Website? Area/state that you dance in? Maybe even a line that says something like "To contact Bo for your event:" above your contact info?
    The font you used for your email addy and number look a little rough around the edges too, unless that's an artifact of uploading it here.
    Anyhoo, just some ideas, but I do think it's gorgeous and a very cool layout. I like the scrolly bits :)
    • Re: Feedback needed

      Mon, April 28, 2008 - 4:43 PM
      The roughness is probably from uploading... I do not see it, and it's a very high-res image.

      Thanks for the O-suggestion! It's my name, so I wouldn't notice that!
      • Re: Feedback needed

        Mon, April 28, 2008 - 4:53 PM
        And I like the suggestion of adding something informative (contact Bo... etc.) but I'm trying to figure out how to word it! Also, this is mainly for contact info right now, so I'm trying to figure out what to put on it that is appropriate.
        • Re: Feedback needed

          Mon, April 28, 2008 - 5:16 PM
          I really like that you turned the card so it's not the typical business card orientation...also love the detailing work around the edges. Maybe a subtle change of tone of color or value will make the lettering appear more clear.
  • Re: Feedback needed

    Mon, April 28, 2008 - 5:35 PM
    Lovely look!
    Leave the 'O' the size it is, enlarge the 'B' by 10%
    Move the contact information up a smidgeon (half the text height) and enlarge the font about 25%
    The design is forming a mirrored 'C'. The 'S' form is more attractive and gives the reader the all-important illusion of '3'. You may want to revisit that.
    You form the 'd' shape. A slight readjustment can turn that into an 'S'

Recent topics in "The Biz of Belly Dance"